應該先交代阿五是你妹妹。整個故事脈絡和伏線不清，倒敘也可以，但你顯然不是倒敘。希望越寫越好。

來源: Maude 於 2013-09-22 22:25:02 [博客] [舊帖] [給我悄悄話] 本文已被閱讀：次

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